Tuesday, February 20, 2018

Gone! In Too Deep - WEP February Challenge


The sailing ship, Lucky Ladybobbed in the waters of Schooner Cove in old Key West. I sat in the bar nearby sipping a Mojito. Tonight, I would be on that tall-masted beauty.



Free Use Image* - Sailing Ship

IN TOO DEEP and GONE!

"Leave the city behind," my friends said, "go somewhere new. You need a change." 

It wasn't romance I was running from; nothing so simple as that. I had told my dark secret to no one, and without clues, the police had no reason to question me. A new identity, a new face, and no one will ever know what happened to me, that woman who fell overboard during the midnight astronomy cruise. 

I waited until all was quiet, the guests were in their bunks, and the captain was in his quarters. Slipping over the side of the sailing ship, I dropped silently into the warm water. The black wetsuit made me nearly invisible in the darkness. I glided toward the meeting spot where a fishing boat signalled with a small light. I paid well, so no questions were asked. 

The old fisherman in the boat had tackle for mullet fishing, in case we were stopped by the Coast Guard. I changed in his cabin packing the wetsuit in a bag to discard as soon as I could. I was brought to shore at a location a few miles from the airport and caught a cab nearby. I had a one-way ticket to London on British Airways. I would decide my final destination from there.

In London, I searched the news and found the article I was looking for:Woman Lost at Sea on Cruise in Key West. All the pieces were falling into place. The local police in Key West, Florida would be sending divers down to locate the body. It was possible, according to 'the experts', that no body would be found. There had been an increase in the local sharks known to occupy the Florida waters.

Being considered dead could benefit me in several ways. It's easier to be 'born again' with surgery, than to find a safe hiding place.

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Here I sit now in my Paris apartment, wondering what my next move will be. I'm in too deep to change my mind. Freedom is a hell of a lot better than spending time in prison. I will be forever haunted by what I call an honourable act, some call revenge, and the law calls murder. I knew it came with a price.

I  closed my eyes, but I felt the memory coming back, and then I was there, back in that dimly lit hallway of an old apartment building. . .

. . .I'm walking down the corridor. . .I hear small noises like talking, I'm almost there, get ready, release the safety, secure grip, push door, throw in a smoke device. It lands between the man and his woman on the bed. This man killed my sister. They turn as one, I aim and fire, intent only on accuracy. Snick! Smoke is filling the room. No witnesses. Aim. Snick! Keep moving fast. . .  Focus. Remove silencer, empty chambers, get out of the building. Into the car and on the road.


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I pulled myself out of the memory of that vivid moment that kept fermenting and washing over my thoughts without warning. It was a trigger for anxiety and paranoia. I took some pills to suppress the memory of my crime, before it drove me mad. This was the price I paid for the satisfaction of seeing my sister's murderer dead.

I sipped the wine in front of me and felt the coolness slip down my throat. Life on the run was the path before me. I would have to forget old friends, old lovers, and never go home again. I have to become someone totally different. I have to believe the lie myself.

The deed is done. Do I regret it?

No. It was necessary.

"More wine, s'il vous plait?"

"Oui, Madamoiselle."


WC = 672

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What would you do if someone you loved was murdered and you knew who did it? Would you exact revenge? Do you think you could handle changing identities and your face?

Please leave a comment to let me know you stopped by, and I'll respond. Thanks for visiting!

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Write, Edit, Publish (WEP) - The Challenge





It's time for another year of WEP challenges - with the support team of Nilanjana Bose and Olga Godim adding their imaginings and creativity. Thanks to Denise and Yolanda for being the hosts! 

The challenge:
Create an artistic entry using the given prompt: a poem, a flash fiction piece of 1000 words or less, a non-fiction piece detailing your personal experience or someone else's experience, write a script, draw your dreams, or post a photograph or a photo essay. The genre and the artistic choice are yours!

Be sure to check all the other entrants on the WEP participation list! 

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Note: this story is a compilation of bits and pieces re-purposed to create a new story. You may remember the gun scene from WEP - Changing Faces - What Now? 

Sailing Ship
Free Use Image: Pixabay

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55 comments:

  1. I don't know what I would do. I don't see myself as the violent type to enact revenge; but some crimes need to be answered with the same violence. Yes, I'm in favor of the death penalty for certain crimes. Like, mass murder.

    A thought provoking excerpt. Tough decisions in here.

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    1. I'm with you as far as the death penalty, especially for mass murder and shootings. Some events can cause a person to take matters into their own hands, not necessarily because they are psychopaths, but because they step over the edge. . .

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  2. Your story made me think. Would I do the same? I doubt it. But we never know our full potential until life tests us, so I can't say for sure. I think I'd try to exact revenge but not openly. Maybe in some way that would let me in the clear. My imagination is stirring. Maybe I could write a story on the subject. One thing I can promise you: it will be totally different from yours. Probably with magic.

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    1. That sounds interesting, injecting magic into the storyline. Let me know if you write a story like that. I'd like to read it. Like you said, when tested, we find out what we're capable of.

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  3. A very intriguing read. I love this idea of going out on a boat and staging one's own death. Not so certain about the murky area of taking the law into your own hands. A fascinating story.

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    1. It takes a strong person to disappear and come back as another. This woman had special skills learned in her former life.

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  4. A thought provoking entry, and a great take on the prompt. Would I be able to kill in revenge - I don't think so, but it's easy to theorise. Reactions are unpredictable when faced with real life situations, I like to think I'm rational and won't take the law into my own hands...but who knows for sure? :)

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    1. The consequences could be dire, but some do manage to hide in plain sight, with a little help from surgery, money, and knowledge. It's a moral decision, but family ties can be strong.

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  5. Today, so many people are committing crimes against innocence people and getting away with it. Here in Germany, they get a slap on the hand and for many they go out and do the same thing again. Your story made me think about what I would do. I don't have much trust in the judicial system, here. They're too busy protecting the guilty and the victims of crimes are forgotten.
    Your story is a flash that engaged my mind.
    Well done.
    Shalom aleichem,
    Pat G

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    1. I agree with you, Pat. Our police here have also dragged their feet when they should have listened and over-reacted on many occasions. The legal system is also riddled with incompetent judges and unprincipled lawyers. This is a common thread of today's society. Glad it made you wonder.

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  6. No, I couldn't. Make such drastic steps to completely disappear, leave family and friends, or live with the anxiety - guilt. I believe in the ultimate judgement.
    But well done! Sometimes we lose ourselves in the moment. I hope she finds peace, although revenge seldom ends that way.
    Great entry! Thanks, D. G.!

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    1. Only time will tell about the effects of cold blooded killing. Yes, he may have deserved it, but the other person - the woman, was in the wrong place and time.

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  7. Your piece captivated me. I felt the peril and promise of starting a new life elsewhere after exacting bloody revenge. Nicely done!

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    1. Starting over would be interesting, but losing contact with family and friends would be tough.

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  8. Hi DG - I wondered when Paris would pop up!

    I simply cannot imagine doing anything like this ... but I wouldn't let go - they'd be pursued and the murder would always be there as near the front as I could make it.

    Fascinating story - a tv series could so easily be made to include this ... but I'd hate to be on the run for the rest of my life ...

    I'd rather not be tested ... thank you! Congratulations ... lots more to come out of this - cheers Hilary

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    1. Paris is always just around the corner of my mind. . .I don't know if I could handle shooting someone either, but there is a Bruce Willis movie or tv show that's being advertised with Bruce taking the law into his own hands.

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  9. Revenge and a life change always come at a cost. Most would not be willing to pay the price of either task. Well done.

    from:christopherscottauthor.wordpress.com

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    1. Most upstanding citizens would agree with you, yes, but there is always that section of society that plays by its own rules.

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  10. An interesting way to disappear. I could not kill anyone but I understand the desire for revenge.

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    1. One family recently in a court case said that the killer had made them learn to hate. How true. Next comes revenge.

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  11. Goodness, a thought-provoking story. I love it! But what would I do? If it was my child that was murdered, yeah I'd probably do what she did. Anyone else, who knows.

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    1. The pain of loss and grief and the anger can make those related to victims forget the rights and wrongs.

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  12. Death of a love by
    The hands of another
    With a way to
    See they paid

    A question you ask
    On it I'll pounder
    Until in the grave
    Someday there laid

    Yet two were shot
    In the story I read
    Will revenge for her
    Not ever go away

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    1. Maybe not. One killed was guilty, one was not. She'll probably have to take pills for a long time to help her put some distance between her and that memory.

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    2. Two places small change

      This man killed my sister
      these two killed my sister

      seeing my sister's murderer dead.
      seeing my sister's murderers dead.

      Revenge is sweet but she will still have to hide from the cops.

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  13. If it was outright murder and they got away with it, hmmmm, not sure I'd ever shoot any outright, but I'd make their life a living hell. Not sure I'd run away with a new face like she did though. Plus that takes $$$$ to get away clean.

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    1. Yes you're right, money was essential and connections, too. Making the killer's life a living hell is another way to exact revenge, but this is a paid killer, regardless of whether he's an agent or a hitman. he would likely come after anyone bothering him.

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  14. The choices we make, D.G. I'm not a revengful person who would do what your MC did. It's not just a matter of 'what if it happened to you?' I couldn't. And I don't believe in capital punishment either, although it's still alive and well in some countries. Too easy to kill the innocent and the black.

    We had a very well publicised case in Australia of a 14-year0old abducted and tortured and killed and buried in a local forest. His parents never gave up. They kept pursuing the law, making it such a media-open case it forced the police to go above the line of duty. It paid off. The killer was arrested (known to police from day one), went to trial and confessed where the body was buried. These parents avenged their son, but it just makes me sad for the hundreds of other children who go missing and their parents don't devote their lives to tracking down their killers.

    If you want to read more, google 'Daniel Morecomb.' Inspirational story of parental love. and never giving up.

    See what your story awoke in me? Very provocative. Thanks for sharing such a controversial (to some) issue. Never hurts to make us think.

    Denise

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    1. I may look up that story, it's intriguing. Tenacity can pay off, but so many victims become 'cold cases'. Too many killers hire good lawyers and get 'off' on technicalities. It's a tough moral choice regarding the death penalty, but rehabilitation hasn't helped very many who recommit the same crimes. And our prisons are full.

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  15. I would definitely want revenge.

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    1. I understand that. Your honesty is appealing, JoJo. Thanks for dropping by.

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  16. Dangerous, yet, fun story.
    I'd like to think that I wouldn't seek revenge, but it's hard to say until put in that situation. I'm pretty sure I wouldn't be happy with changing my face, but I think I could handle a new life/identity if I needed too.

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    1. It would be weird to look at yourself in the mirror and see someone strange. I guess you could get used to it.

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  17. Hi DG
    There are no easy answers to the questions raised. It's pretty complex when loss of human life is involved. I'd like to think that I'm not a vengeful person. The older I get, the more I see the pointlessness of it all. Essentially I believe life is a journey about healing and learning. Your story brings a lot of issues to the fore and yes I'd hate to be be on the run for the rest of my life. I value my freedom but It is easier to theorise than face the actual situation. So much to think about, thank you.

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    1. Wisdom does come with more life experience if we are open to it, but many variables can play a part: stress, how much family and how close one is to them, whether one has the skill and abilities to commit a crime and then disappear or destroy the evidence. People can become hardened to what they've done and feel no remorse.

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  18. Though I might think about vengeance, I'm not really the vengeful type. I figure karma eventually fixes everything and it's not up to me.

    I could never just disappear either. I have too many people who I care about and want to keep seeing.

    Arlee Bird
    Tossing It Out

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    1. Most people would agree with you, Lee, which means most people are rational and law abiding. But a small percentage seem to slip over that line. Thanks for visiting!

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  19. Of course I would seek revenge, but something as extreme as this? I think not because the life changing effect would be too much to bear and the fear of being found out ever present. Great story though!

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    1. Some will, and some won't. It all depends on variables. It would be a lot to live with.

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  20. Hi D.G.....

    Wonderful entry. I was riveted.... And very THOUGHT PROVOKING..... As far as murder. I couldn't, but I would like to see justice to the murderer. I am a firm believer in God will take care of them, I wouldn't need to physically do the deed....

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    1. Well, I've been reading Sherlock Holmes through two volumes and it seems the criminally minded always flourish. This was murder as an answer for murder. . .so does one justify the other? Likely not, but it makes for good stories.

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    2. Very true.... Funny I began reading the Adventures of Sherlock Holmes and after reading the first vignette, I put it down. He never explained why the murder took place and finding how he submitted the murderer was also not explained well... I was so disappointed.

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  21. It's a bit extreme for me. No, I don't think I'd change my face. Then again, I'm pretty good at being in the shadows.

    Good job with this writing. I like how you wrote your characters.

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    1. You can learn a lot by being in the shadows.

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  22. we shall take it as a lesson. not everyone can relate to a story and yes people don't put yourself in a fictional situation just learn and move on. well done.

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  23. Great writing, thank goodness it's fiction - I hope!

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    1. Of course, it's fiction. . .along the lines of someone like a former agent. They are trained to kill efficiently and to be invisible.

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  24. Great writing, thank goodness it's fiction - I hope!

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  25. Ooh this was so good! I loved the atmosphere! And it's such an interesting question. I can't imagine I'd murder anyone but fortunately I've never had someone I love murdered. Love this woman you created. Great job!

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    1. Thanks for dropping by, and for the kind words. Most people can't imagine that they would do anything so drastic, but put them into a situation that threatens their life or their family and that could change.

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  26. I suppose we never know what we would do until faced with a circumstance...

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    1. True. The details and the personalities of the people involved will be factors that determine how one responds to a given situation. Thanks for visiting OE!

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  27. Wow. That's an incredible choice, but a tough one to make.

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